Society is becoming obsessed with material good like cars, designer clothes and jewellery. We have stopped carrying about the important things and that is why divorce rates are so high. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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people are starting to care more about the looks

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than the value,

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, people like

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iphone

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iPhone

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more than any other company even tho they provide the same specs.

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family's

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families

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that care about fashion

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poor and the husbands cannot provide for their

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and that's why it

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To improve task response, provide more developed arguments. Discuss both views regarding materialism and divorce rates. This ensures a balanced argument.

coherence cohesion

Enhance coherence by organizing ideas logically. Ensure each paragraph has a central idea and flows smoothly to the next.

coherence cohesion

Include a clear conclusion that summarizes your position and provides a closing thought on the topic.

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Your position on the topic is clear, and you provide some examples to support your views.

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The essay attempts to address the relationship between materialism and divorce rates, indicating a grasp of the task.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

59 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

material goods = things we buy, such as cars, clothes, and jewellery
be obsessed with = care about something too much
status = the respect people think you have in society
wealth = a lot of money or valuable things
lifestyle = the way a person lives
consumer culture = a society where buying things is very important
social pressure = pressure from other people to look successful
financial stress = worry about money
high expectations = wanting too much
relationship breakdown = when a marriage or relationship fails
quality time = time spent together in a close and caring way
shared values = beliefs that both people think are important
trust and respect = two key parts of a strong marriage
work-life balance = giving enough time to both job and family
to neglect = to not give enough care or attention
to drift apart = to become less close over time
marital conflict = serious disagreement between husband and wife
a sense of success = feeling that you are doing well in life
inner values = important personal beliefs, not money or things
to some extent = partly, but not fully

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