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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no doubt the fact that the population
growht
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growth
 has required
another sources
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another source
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 of
food
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 to satisfy people’s requirements.
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 it is a commonly held belief that
insects
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 can be a
food
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 option, others argue that
this
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 option not only has a detrimental impact on health but
also
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 on nature.
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 the pros and cons of eating
insects
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insects
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 as
source
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 of
food
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has
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 been eaten by different cultures, and they believe that
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insects
 are considered to be a good alternative for protein.
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,
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Chinese
eat
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insects
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 as their main meal, and they use them as a protein source.
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, some people believe that the body’s immunity is increased by adding
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insects
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 to their meals, which prevents them from
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illness
idleness
.
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,
insects
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 as
food
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 to promoting the body system.
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, one of eating
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 disadvantages that it
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could result in serious diseases. It is
also
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 possible to say that some types of
insects
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 lead to
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the chance of diagnose with diseases,
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cancer, or increase the possibility of
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 having a heart attack.
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, using
insects
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 as a form of
food
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 can negatively influence our ecosystem, as the extinction of
insects
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 could destroy plants that feed on them.
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, the results of
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an American
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 study found that 76% of plants will be
disappread
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disappeared
disappear
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 of
instect
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insect
extincting
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extinctions
. In conclusion,
insects
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 can be a
food
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 source as some believe
at
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in
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 their benefits.
However
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, their drawbacks might badly impact our health and environment,
therefore
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, I tend to believe that its
negativety
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negativity
negative
outwieght
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outweigh
outweighed
 its
positvity
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positivity
.

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grammatical accuracy
Consider improving grammatical accuracy and range. Note some errors such as 'population growht' instead of 'population growth' which could be distracting.
coherence cohesion
Aim to maintain clarity and flow by linking ideas more smoothly. For instance, transition phrases can enhance the coherence of the essay.
task achievement
Support your arguments with more varied examples from different parts of the world or studies to strengthen your position.
introduction conclusion present
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, setting the framework for the discussion on edible insects as a food source.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples, like the Chinese eating habits and the American study, to illustrate your points.
supported main points
The main points are supported with explanations, contributing to the essay's development.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • food scarcity
  • edible insects
  • nutritional benefits
  • cultural barriers
  • psychological barriers
  • mainstream food source
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • environmentally sustainable
  • economic benefits
  • local farmers
  • health safety
  • allergies
  • pesticides
  • pollutants
  • ecosystems
  • biodiversity
  • regulations
  • hygiene
  • unforeseen consequences
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