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Band 5.5

Write a letter to landlord about maintenance issue the building

Dear Mr. John, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to express my dissatisfaction
on
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 the substandard quality of the rental apartment you issued me on a lease agreement. I have been staying at
this
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 property for
past
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 2 weeks.
Last
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 week, I found that there are
plethora
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 of maintenance issues in
this
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 building that could be checked promptly. After inspection, I complained
you
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 about the leakage of drainage in the kitchen pipes but you did not take any
further
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 steps for the improvements.
As a result
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,
this
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 hole in the pipeline broadens to the heavy flow of water and it initiated damage in other outlets of the house. Yesterday, I found
accumulation
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 of water in my entire space and took me
few
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a few
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 hours to clean the wet floors.
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 that, electricity supply is
also
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 deducted from the past few days because you did not pay the monthly bills to their department.
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, these issues should be tackled as I am unable to cook anything in the kitchen and use any appliance. I would really appreciate it if you assist me in
this
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 situation. Many times, I tried to contact
at
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your office but it has
of
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 no avail. I already paid you the rent for next month so please kindly bring some professionals to check the apartment boldly. I look forward
for
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 your prompt reply. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully, Sara

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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider organizing the issues more clearly, for example by using bullet points or paragraphs dedicated to each problem.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clarify the time sequence of events to enhance the logical flow of ideas.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific suggestions or requests for what you expect the landlord to do.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter begins and ends with an appropriate greeting and closing, which fits the formal tone of the letter.
Task Achievement
The tone is polite yet firm, which is suitable for a letter addressing issues with a landlord.
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