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Many counties believe that countries should produce food for all population and import as little as possible To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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As global trade increases, many
goods
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 including those we use on
daily
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a daily
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 basis are produced in another country and have to be transported long distances . Do
benefits
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the benefits
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 of
this
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trend
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 outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 In the era of globalization and advanced technology,many commodities are allowed to
transport
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be transported
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other
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 countries,Many countries can get a lot of
goods
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 that they can not produce.I think that the benefits of
this
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trend
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 outweigh the drawbacks. The major advantage of
this
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 development is that customers across the world can take advantage of higher-quality products at fairly competitive prices.
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 is
due to
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 the
possiblity
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possibility
 of creating a fair playing field in terms of dynamic markets and relevant legislation,allowing for the wider availability of various brands and items for the general public.
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,delivering critical materials and components across national boundaries is likely to mitigate the risk of resource scarcity in the local market.To be specific,if
acoutry’s
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a country’s
 raw materials for some essential commodities are in limited supply,transporting
goods
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 from another country could be an ideal solution to the local shortage,
thus
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 minimizing the
unfavorable
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unfavourable
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 effects on the residents.
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While others
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 may oppose
such
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trend
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a trend
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,claiming that long-distance transport is a major contributor to environmental disruption.
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 is true to some extent as delivering
goods
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 by plane is fuel-consuming and would lead to greenhouse gas emissions.
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 a source of global emissions.
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,given the current research in the field of alternative energy,it should not be
diffcult
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difficult
 to convert greenhouse gases like
carbone
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carbon
 dioxide into renewable fuels in the
furture
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future
,which could
also
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 provide human beings with a possible mechanism to store energy. In
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conclusion
conculsion
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conclusion
,I am optimistic about
this
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 and firmly believe that delivering daily necessities to other countries provides mankind with significant merits as long as the whole society is mindful of
them
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the
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,potential
risk
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risks
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 associated with long-distance transportation and takes effective
measure
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measures
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 to minimize them
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Coherence
Organize the essay into clearer paragraphs to enhance the logical structure. For example, dedicate one paragraph to each main point.
Task
Provide more specific examples to support your arguments, making it easier for the reader to understand your points.
Miscellaneous
Pay attention to the minor grammar and punctuation errors. While they do not heavily impact your score, refining them will improve overall clarity.
Coherence
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which contribute to its overall coherence.
Task
You effectively explained the advantages and disadvantages of global trade in relation to the transportation of goods.
Task
You demonstrated a good understanding of the topic and its implications, which contributes to a strong task response.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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