The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.   Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.   

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the dynamics in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing
housework
in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. In 1920, 40% of households had a washing machine.
This
number kept increasing
stably
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steadily
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over the years until it reached 72% in 2019. Followed by
this
is the vacuum cleaner, which started lower
with
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at
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30%, but
then
had a significant rise between 1940 and 1960, and
having
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apply
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all of the population had it by 2019.
However
, what stood out the most
is
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was
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the refrigerator. In 1920, not a single
household
owns
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owned
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a refrigerator. Only
until
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in
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1940 did 55% of
the
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apply
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household
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households
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had
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have
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refrigerators. Every
household
eventually had a refrigerator by 2019.
On the other hand
,
housework
Correct article usage
the housework
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rate kept decreasing over the
last
decade,
due to
the rise of ownership in electrical appliances. In 1920, each
household
had an average of
having
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apply
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50 hours of
housework
every week.
However
, the same can not be said by 2019, as it became only 10 hours per week. In conclusion, the increase of ownership
in
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of
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electrical appliances over the
last
decade affects the number of hours put
by
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in by
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the
household
in doing 
housework
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words housework, household with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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