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The line graph shows information about house price in three countries between 1997 and 2014

The line graph shows information about house price in three countries between 1997 and 2014
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The graph shows the average house price in three countries (A,
B
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, and
C
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) from 1997 to 2014.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 house
prices
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 in
Country
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B
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 were the highest throughout the period,
while
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Country
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C
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 had the lowest. There was
also
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 a significant fluctuation in
Country
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 A’s
prices
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, especially in the mid-2000s. At the start of the period in 1997, the average price of houses in
Country
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B
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 was about $250,000, which was much higher than
Country
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 A and
C
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, both of which were below $100,000. Over the years, the price in
Country
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B
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 steadily increased, peaking at approximately $700,000 in 2008 before
leveling
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 off slightly in the final years.
Country
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 A,
on the other hand
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, experienced a more unstable trend. It started low at around $100,000 in 1997, climbed sharply to nearly $300,000 by 2005,
then
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 dropped back to $250,000 around 2009.
However
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, by the end of the period,
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 in
Country
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 A reached about $350,000. Meanwhile,
Country
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C
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 remained relatively steady, with only a gradual increase from $50,000 to about $150,000 over the 17 years. It had the least fluctuation compared to the other two countries.
Country
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B
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 had the highest
prices
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,
while
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Country
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C
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 was
lowest
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the lowest
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 and
stable
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most stable
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.
Country
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 A showed the most noticeable volatility in
prices
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words b, c, prices, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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