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Band 7

The maps below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.

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The maps illustrate the site of the
airport
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 now and how it will look after
development
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 next year.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 now
airport
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 is tiny with few opportunities, but after
development
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, there will be many sectors of opportunity. As the image shows, at the top of the
airport
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 there is a walkway covered with eight gates,
whereas
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 after
development
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 it will be reconstructed into a sky train covered with eighteen gates. Security
passport
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control
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 and
passport
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control
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 customs will not be changed, but near the security,
passport
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control
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 will be checked in service . The cafe near the security
passport
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control
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 will be changed to a bag drop service. Now near the identification
control
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 customs does not
any
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have any
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 services, but after
development
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, it will be constructed currency exchange service.
Then
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, at the bottom of the
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airport
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airport,
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 there is one departure and arrival door,
however
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, after the
development
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 doors will be two.
Finally
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, the
last
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 change in the coming
development
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 is car hire. Car hire will appear
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words airport, development, passport, control with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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