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Band 6.5

The maps below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

#maps #show #site #airport #redevelopment #year #summarise #information #features #comparisons
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The maps
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the site of
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airport
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the airport
an airport
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 now and how it will look after
development
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 next year.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 now
airport
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 is tiny with
little
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few
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 opportunities, but after
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development
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development,
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it
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there
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 will be many sectors of opportunity. As the image shows,
in
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at
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top
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the top
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 of the
airport
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 there is
walkway
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a walkway
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 covered with eight gates,
whereas
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 after
development
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 it will be reconstructed
to
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into
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sky
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a sky
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 train covered with eighteen gates. Security
passport
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control
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 and
passport
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control
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 customs will not be changed, but near the
security
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security,
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passport
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control
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 will be
check
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checked
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 in service .
Cafe
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The cafe
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 near the security
passport
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control
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 will be changed to
bag
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a bag
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 drop service. Now near the identification
control
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 customs
has
Verb problem
does
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 not any services, but after
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development
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development,
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 it will be constructed currency exchange service.
Then
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,
in
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at
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 the bottom of the
airport
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 there
are
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is
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 one departure and arrival door,
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however
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however,
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 after the
development
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 doors will be two.
Finally
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,
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last
Correct article usage
the last
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 change in
coming
Correct article usage
the coming
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development
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 is car hire. Car hire will
be appeared
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appear
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words airport, development, passport, control with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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