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The plans below show the layout of the ground floor of a museum in 1990 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
The two floor plans compare the layout of
ground
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the ground
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 floor of
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museum
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the museum
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 in 1990 and 2010.
Body paragraph 1
Overall
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, the
museum
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 underwent considerable redevelopment over the two decades.
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 some facilities
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such
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, such
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 as the stairs, the natural
history
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room
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 and the local
history
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room
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room,
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 remained, multiple new areas were constructed
and
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 several galleries were repurposed.
Body paragraph 2
In 1990, on the left-hand side of the entrance had a gift
shop
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 above the natural
history
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room
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, and the
museum
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 office was located at the far-west corner. By 2010, the former gift
shop
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 had been transformed into a combined café and gift
shop
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. A new lift was built between
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shop
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 and the natural
history
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room
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. The natural
history
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room
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 and
museum
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 office stayed in their original position. The reception counter near the entrance was repositioned. The statue moved from the place between the
shop
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 and
stairs
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the stairs
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 to the
center
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 of
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museum
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the museum
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 as well.
Body paragraph 3
On the right side of the layout, the 1990 archaeology gallery had gone. It was replaced by the children’s interactive zone and the poster display area.
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, the local-
history
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room
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 stayed in the southeast corner.
Conclusion
To sum up
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, the
museum
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’s ground floor has undergone a series of significant changes over the period.

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task response
Give a more full report of the plan. Say where the new cafe and shop are, where the lift is, and how the right side changed. Also check that every key change on both plans is named.
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Use clear place words such as north, south, left, right, next to, and in the middle. This will help the reader see each change without looking back at the plan.
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Be careful with facts from the plan. Do not say that an area stayed the same unless the two plans show this clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Your report has a clear start, main body, and end. For an even smoother flow, group all changes on the left in one part and all changes on the right in one part, then use one short final summary.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like 'while', 'by 2010', 'in contrast', and 'as a result'. Do not repeat the same idea in both the overview and the last paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use full forms in key lines. For example, write 'the ground floor of the museum' and 'the centre of the museum' to make the text more clear.
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You give a clear main view: the museum changed a lot, but some rooms stayed in place.
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You name several important changes, such as the new lift, the cafe and gift shop, and the children’s area.
coherence and cohesion
The essay is easy to follow because it moves from an overview to the left side and then the right side.
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You use useful time links, such as 'In 1990' and 'By 2010', to show change clearly.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • exhibition space
  • gallery rooms
  • visitor facilities
  • accessibility
  • redesign
  • expansion
  • administrative areas
  • staff-only areas
  • gift shop
  • entrance
  • lobby area
  • restrooms
  • cafes
  • improvements
  • access areas
  • ground floor
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