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The plans below show the layout of the ground floor of a museum in 1990 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two plans
shows
Correct subject-verb agreement
show
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 changes of the ground floor in 1990 and 2010. A lot has
change
Wrong verb form
changed
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 during
this
Linking Words
 time,
for
Linking Words
example
Punctuation problem
example,
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 in 1990
statue
Correct article usage
the statue
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located
Verb problem
was located
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 in front of
stairs
Correct article usage
the stairs
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, but in 2010 in the centre of the hall.
Also
Linking Words
, new zones have appeared,
for example
Linking Words
 poster display area and
children’s
Correct article usage
the children’s
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 interactive zone.
However
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? museum office, natural history
room
Use synonyms
, local history
room
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 and gift shop have stayed on their plays. The most striking alteration has been in
Archeology
Correct determiner usage
the Archaeology
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 gallery in 2010
Punctuation problem
. This
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this
Linking Words
room
Use synonyms
 is not working. Another important change happened with
entrance
Correct article usage
the entrance
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which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 has almost doubled in size.
Reception
Correct article usage
The reception
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 counter was moved a little bit forward. In
2010
Punctuation problem
2010,
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 an elevator appeared between
cafe
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the cafe
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 and gift shop
and
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, and
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natural
Correct article usage
the natural
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 history
room
Use synonyms
.
In addition
Linking Words
, in
2010
Punctuation problem
2010,
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 three rooms have not walls,
although
Linking Words
 in 1990 there were doors. Taken as a whole,
in
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apply
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the museum’s ground floor
much
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must
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 have changed between 1990 and
2010
Punctuation problem
2010,
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such
Linking Words
 as rooms, statues and walls.

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task response
Write one clear overview with the main changes. Say what stayed the same and what changed the most.
coherence and cohesion
Group ideas by place or by type of change. This will make the report easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear links like 'while', 'also', 'in contrast', and 'by 2010'. Do not use a question mark in the middle of a sentence.
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Add a few more key details from the plans, but do not list too many small points.
coherence and cohesion
Check each sentence form. Some ideas are good, but they are hard to follow because of grammar mistakes.
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You mention several main changes, such as the new zones, the moved statue, and the bigger entrance.
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You also note some parts that did not change, like the office, gift shop, and two history rooms.
coherence and cohesion
The report has a short start and a short end, so the reader can see the topic and your final view.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • exhibition space
  • gallery rooms
  • visitor facilities
  • accessibility
  • redesign
  • expansion
  • administrative areas
  • staff-only areas
  • gift shop
  • entrance
  • lobby area
  • restrooms
  • cafes
  • improvements
  • access areas
  • ground floor
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