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The plans below show the layout of the ground floor of a museum in 1990 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the underground level evolution of a
museum
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 over time, the timeline being 1990-2010. Many of the
museum
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 rooms were changed through the years
like
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, like
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 the gift shop
which
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, which
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 went through an increase in surface area and now features a café. Despite the natural history room and the
museum
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 office remaining the same
everything
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 changed. The entrance was widened, the Local History Room’s walls were removed, and the Archaeology gallery was split into two separate rooms divided by a wall in between them; those are the Poster display area and the Children’s interactive zone. One technical feature that was added is the lift, which makes travelling between the floors easier. Another important aspect of the
museum
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 layout is that the reception counter has decreased in size, and it was moved right next to the
Museum
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 office. We can
also
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 notice that the statue, which used to be positioned right between the stairs and the gift
shop
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shop,
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 was now moved
in
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 the middle of the
museum
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.

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task response
Task response: The essay talks about changes but has no clear opening and closing. Add a short start that says what you compare, and end with a brief summary of the changes.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: Use more linking words like 'also', 'but', 'however'. Break long lines into small parts and group ideas clearly.
organization
Organization: Give a short intro, then talk about 1990, then about 2010, then compare. Finish with a short overall view.
lexical
Vocabulary: Use simple, exact words. Check spellings and keep terms the same across the text.
grammar
Grammar: Watch commas and two clauses in one sentence. Example: 'the statue, which used to be between the stairs and the gift shop, is now in the middle.'
content
The essay shows many changes in the plan.
style
Language is simple and easy to read.
structure
It sticks to the task of describing layout changes.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • exhibition space
  • gallery rooms
  • visitor facilities
  • accessibility
  • redesign
  • expansion
  • administrative areas
  • staff-only areas
  • gift shop
  • entrance
  • lobby area
  • restrooms
  • cafes
  • improvements
  • access areas
  • ground floor
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