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The plans below show the layout of the ground floor of a museum in 1990 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans below demonstrate the layout of the ground level of a museum in 1990 and in 2010. The
area
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 nearest the stairs suffered the most striking alteration. Between
natural
Correct article usage
the natural

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 history room and gift shop a lift was installed. The gift shop
area
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 expanded, and on the upper-left
corner
Add a comma
corner,

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase on the upper-left corner. Consider adding a comma.

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 a café zone was built. The statue’s position was moved from the northern part to the floor’s
center
Change the spelling
centre

The spelling of center is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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. At the top-right
corner
Add a comma
corner,

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase At the top-right corner. Consider adding a comma.

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 the children’s interactive zone was constructed
instead
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 of the
half space
Add a hyphen
half-space

It appears that half space is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

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 occupied by the archaeology gallery back in 1990.
Instead
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 of another half, a poster display
area
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 was
build
Wrong verb form
built

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb build. Consider changing it.

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.
Local
Correct article usage
The local

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 history room
has
Wrong verb form
had

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb has. Consider changing it.

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 the same positioning in 2010,
although
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 its west wall was demolished. A noticeable change is that all
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

area
Fix the agreement mistake
areas

It seems that area may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 located on the right side of the entrance became an open space. In 2010, the entrance became wider than it was 20 years ago,
while
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 the reception counter was separated from
museum
Correct article usage
the museum

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 office. Taken as a whole, the ground floor of the museum went through a series of major alterations.

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Consider providing a clearer overview that encapsulates the main changes rather than just detailing each individual change as they appear.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to improve the flow of your essay, making it easier for the reader to follow the changes over time.
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Try to add more specific examples or details to support your claims, which would strengthen your points and give the reader a clearer picture of the changes.
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The essay accurately identifies several significant changes to the museum layout.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of the essay is generally logical, with a clear sequence of changes over time.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • exhibition space
  • gallery rooms
  • visitor facilities
  • accessibility
  • redesign
  • expansion
  • administrative areas
  • staff-only areas
  • gift shop
  • entrance
  • lobby area
  • restrooms
  • cafes
  • improvements
  • access areas
  • ground floor
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