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The pie charts provide a comparison of the ages of the populations in two nations: Yemen and Italy in 2000 and an estimate for 2050.

The pie charts provide a comparison of the ages of the populations in two nations: Yemen and Italy in 2000 and an estimate for 2050.
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The two pie charts illustrate the
differnces
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differences
difference
 between
ages
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the ages
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 of the Yameni and Italian communities in the year 2000 and provide a
prodictation
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prediction
 for the 2050 year.
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, the most noticeable thing is the
group
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age
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aged
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 of 15-59 years, which held the largest share throughout both years,
espacially
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especially
,
italian
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Italian
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 residents in 2000 had the biggest share. In 2000, the middle
age
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group
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 in
Yamen
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 and Italy had
a significant percentages
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a significant percentage
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 in population distribution, nearly half of the total population, with 46.3% and 61.6%, respectively.
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 the
group
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age
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 of 0-14
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 had half of the percentage in
Yamen
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 but
quarter
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 of the percentage for Italy. people with plus 60 years accounted for 3.6% in
Yamen
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 and 14.3% in Italy. In 2050, the information expected increases for
Yamen
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 in both groups of 15-59 and over 60 by 11% and 2.1%, respectively.
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, the youngest
groub
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group
prodicted
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predicted
 to have a significant decline to reach 37%.
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 Italy will
growth
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 in the oldest
age
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group
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, as 24.1% of
population
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the population
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 will increase to 42.% for
elderly
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the elderly
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 generation.
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, The 0-14 and 15-59
age
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group
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groups
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,
who
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apply
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will experience
decrease
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a decrease
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 from 14.3% to 11.5% and
the
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61.6% will be 46.2%, respectively,
at the end
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 of the period
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Vocabulary: Replace the words group, age, yamen with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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