Some people think that intelligence is innate while others think that we can improve our intelligence through learning. Discuss both sides and give your opinon.

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While
some argue that
intelligence
is
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trait, others suggest that it can be improved through learning and personal development.
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essay agrees with the statement
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intelligence
is a skill that
it
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can be developed because all
people
were born with similar capabilities but the
differences
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is in the way they keep
develop
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them. On the one hand, all
people
born
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having
equalizent
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equal
abilities and
intelligence
is one of the
skill
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that individuals
born
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with.
However
,
they
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the
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way they receive education
identify
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identifies
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how the level of their
intelligence
will become, others are
practicing
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and excessive pressure
are rise
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the level of
smartinity
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salinity
.
For example
, in the
mathamatics
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mathematics
exam which depends more on smartness, you can find many students pass the exam
due to
the excellent teacher who
teached
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teaches
them.
On the other hand
,
intelligence
is a skill that totally
depend
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on learning,
people
born
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are born
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with
intelligence
but it never enough to be smart person, education
are
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the primary main that
make
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smart individuals because it
motivate
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motivates
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genes with knowledge and understanding, which help
people
to solve equations and manage problems.
For instance
,solving puzzles frequently
contributing
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contributes
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in
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to
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enhanse
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enhance
the level of
intelligence
and focus that
help
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helps
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people
be smart. In conclusion, since all
people
born
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are born
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with
intelligence
, they
all
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are all
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not smart in the same percentage because
intelligence
is a gene that
need
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needs
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other factors to promote it
such
as learning and practicing.
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