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The given two pie charts illustrate information about the income of a Charted Accountaed firm, and its expenditures from the year 2015 to 2016.

The given two pie charts illustrate information about the income of a Charted Accountaed firm, and its expenditures from the year 2015 to 2016.
The given two pie charts illustrate information about the
income
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 of a Charted Accountaed
firm
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 and its expenditures from the year 2015 to 2016.
Overall
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, most of the
income
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 came from audit
services
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 and taxation
services
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,
while
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 the least amount of
income
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 came from other types of
income
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 for the
firm
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. Meanwhile, the largest expense of the
firm
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 was salaries. For the
Charted
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Chartered
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 Accountant
firm
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, 40% of
income
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 came from audit
services
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while
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 30% of
income
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 came from taxation
services
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.
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, only 10% of
income
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 came from other
services
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. In terms of expenditure, for the
firm
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, the major proportion of expense was salary, as it was 30% of the
overall
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 expenditures of the
Charted
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Chartered
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 Accountant
firm
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. Meanwhile, 25% of the expenditures went to the partner's commission.
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, 15% of
expenses
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the expenses
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 of the
firm
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 were to rent
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electricity
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services
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 and taxes. Only 5% of expenses went for reserve.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, firm, services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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