9.Some parents believe that children today spend too much time looking at screens. Others argue that this is necessary in the modern world. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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parents
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in today’s era spend too much Use synonyms
time
in front of the Use synonyms
screen
and don’t go outside as often as before, Use synonyms
while
others believe that Linking Words
this
is an essential development for the modern world. Linking Words
Although
the latter opinion has its own merits, I believe that teenagers could benefit from both perspectives if they divided their Linking Words
time
wisely. Use synonyms
This
essay will discuss both viewpoints and provide my opinion on the matter.
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parents
are concerned about the negative impacts of excessive Use synonyms
screen
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time
on Use synonyms
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children’s
physical Use synonyms
health
. Use synonyms
Firstly
, Linking Words
prolongued
exposure to blue screens can lead to eye strain which is a main contributor to weakened eyesight when growing up to adulthood. Correct your spelling
prolonged
This
is because when teenagers are absorbed in the activities they are doing on the Linking Words
screen
they tend to lose track of Use synonyms
time
and don’t realize how much Use synonyms
time
has passed, essentially losing awareness of the Use synonyms
time
going by. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, spending too much Linking Words
time
on the Use synonyms
screen
can negatively affect the Use synonyms
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children
social skills and mental Change noun form
children's
health
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spend
an
excessive Correct article usage
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time
on digital Use synonyms
devices
or on the Use synonyms
internet
tend to have fewer opportunities to engage in Use synonyms
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meaningful Correct article usage
apply
conversation
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conversations
relationship
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relationships
,
because they are primarily spending Remove the comma
apply
time
online rather than Use synonyms
real-life
interactions. Change preposition
in real-life
Consequently
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time
on the Use synonyms
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internet
often leads to a decline Capitalize word
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in
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children’s
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and mental Use synonyms
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.
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On the other hand
, there are other Linking Words
parents
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that
are perfectly fine with their Correct pronoun usage
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children
spending Use synonyms
time
on the Use synonyms
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internet
as long as it is not unreasonably long. Capitalize word
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with, they believe technology is one of the Linking Words
key
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keys
for
the personal growth of their child. The Change preposition
to
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as a platform with numerous educational tools and resources that can enhance the child’s insight Change the verb form
serves
of
the world, Change preposition
into
this
can contribute greatly to Linking Words
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children’s
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across opportunities for learning anywhere on the Wrong verb form
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instance
platforms Add the comma(s)
instance,
such
as Youtube, Coursera, Skillshare,… are excellent examples of learning via the Linking Words
Internet
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Moreover
, digital Linking Words
devices
can serve as a medium of communication for Use synonyms
children
to keep in touch with their Use synonyms
familiy
, they can Correct your spelling
family
families
also
provide relaxation and entertainment, offering Linking Words
children
a break from their daily routine and reducing stress.
In conclusion, the usage Use synonyms
digital
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of digital
devices
and exposure to screens have Use synonyms
its
pros and cons. Correct pronoun usage
their
While
it has negative effects on Linking Words
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children’s
physical and mental Use synonyms
health
, it Use synonyms
also
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provide
benefits regarding personal growth and insights with digital Change the verb form
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devices
acting as a platform for learning and relaxing. Use synonyms
Parents
should strike a balance between managing their Use synonyms
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