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The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The charts present a number of International
students
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 who got accepted into three universities .
Overall
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,
Students
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 from
India
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 get the highest number of acceptances at all universities, meanwhile,
students
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 from Colombia are the lowest.
In addition
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, a
university
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 that gives
much place
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many places
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 for each country is the
University
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 of Riverview.
India
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's
people
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 got highly accepted to the
University
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 of Riverview above 7000 individuals can feel the experience of being a student at
this
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 academy. around 6000
people
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 from
India
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 pass to be part of
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University
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the University
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 of Smithtown and 5000
students
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 get accepted into Earlwood
University
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.
Furthermore
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, comparing the number of acceptance all over the country, it decreases as the population of the country, like
India
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 is the first one, followed by Nepal, Vietnam, Indonesia and
then
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 Colombia. Indonesian citizens got accepted for each
university
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 below 2000 place.
People
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 from Colombia just
gets
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get
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 accepted at all universities not exceeding 1000
people
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 for each
university
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, india, university, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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