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the chart below shows how frequently people in the usa ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparision where relevant.

the chart below shows how frequently people in the usa ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparision where relevant.
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The bar chart shows how often
people
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 in the USA ate at fast
food
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 restaurants in 2003, 2006, and 2013. The data is split into six categories of frequency, from every
day
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 to never.
Overall
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, most
people
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 ate fast
food
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 once a
week
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 or once or twice a month in all three years.
However
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, the number of
people
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 eating fast
food
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 every
day
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 was very low, and
this
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 trend did not change much. Looking at the details, in 2006, about 33% of
people
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 ate fast
food
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 once a
week
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, which was the highest in any category that year.
In contrast
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, in 2013, the percentage for once or twice a month was slightly higher than once a
week
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, reaching nearly 30%. The number of
people
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 eating fast
food
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 several times a
week
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 was close to 20% in all years, with small changes.
On the other hand
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, the percentage of
people
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 who never ate fast
food
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 or ate it every
day
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 stayed very low, at under 5%. A few times a year category
also
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 saw a small decrease in 2013 compared to 2003 and 2006. In conclusion, most
people
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 in the USA preferred eating fast
food
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 once a
week
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 or once or twice a month,
while
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 eating every
day
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 or never was not very common. These numbers
shows
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show
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 that fast
food
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 remained popular but not as frequent in 2013.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food, day, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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