Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some job are suitable for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that a few
of
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people
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that
men
and
women
have different properties.
Thus
. some
jobs
are suitable for
men
and some other
jobs
are
also
fit for
women
.
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essay
is
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totaly
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totally
agree
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agrees
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with
this
statement because
,
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Men
can work in
a
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risky
indusries
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industries
unlike
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, unlike
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women
.
However
,
women
could give more in teaching fields.
To begin
with,
men
can work in
a dangerous places
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dangerous places
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such
as finding
petrols
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, building
hauses
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houses
, farming,
car
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and car
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fixations. these
jobs
due
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to how risky it is and somehow
it
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might kill you
i
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think
mens
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men
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could handle
it
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more than
women
because
mens
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men
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have used to do these things before centuries so they could handle the
presure
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pressure
and do a great job with it.
For example
, in 1995
a
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a woman
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women
called
nani
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in the UK tried to fix her car because there was a problem with
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the engin
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engin
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engine
so when she tried to fix the car it suddenly exploded
on
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her face and
unfortunatully
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unfortunately
she died. another point to consider,
women
's teaching is more effective for children
then
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men
's teaching. In
other
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word
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they can communicate better with
kids
so
that is
why they can deliver their
thought
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thoughts
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to
kids
more easily.
For instance
. in 2006 in Saudi Arabia they did an
experement
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experiment
about who could teach
kids
in primary schools better
?
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men
or
women
after the
experement
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experiment
has done it showed that
kids
who learnt from
women
got higher marks in their final exam.
Whereas
,
kids
who learnt from
men
got lower results. In
counclusion
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conclusion
,
men
can't teach
bitter
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better
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than
women
.
women
could not do dangerous work like
men
. so
i
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I
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believe
men
and
women
have different characters that
suits
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different
jobs
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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