Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Kids
are the future of every society. Some
peole
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people
believe
parents
are responsible for how
kids
behaved
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in society,
whereas
others oppose and
says
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school plays
major
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role in teaching values to children. I will be discussing both of the
point
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of
views
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in the upcoming paragraphs. Schools can be considered
great
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a great
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way to teach
kids
, how to be
a good citizens
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a good citizen
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.
For instance
, there are some schools
who
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makes students pray every morning in assembly.
Therefore
, they can learn good values from it.
In addition
, students
learns
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discipline by showing up to classes every day. Having discipline in them can make
kids
behave
good
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in society.
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the
contrast
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contrary
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side,
parents
are always
first
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teacher
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teachers
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to their
kid
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kids
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. Values learnt through
parents
will always play
major
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a major
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role,
how
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in how
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kids
turned
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out in future.
Also
,
parents
are only
teacher
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teachers
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to their own
kids
, so they have plenty of time to teach them in different ways.
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,
however
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however,
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parents
reacts
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to situations presented to them
from
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life ,
kids
will automatically adapt some of their
reaction
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.
Therefore
,
parents
should always be careful,
how
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they handle things
infront
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in front
of their
kids
. In
the
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conclusion , I believe
parents
play
pivotal
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role in
kids
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kids'
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upbringing and
making
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in making
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them
a
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good
citizen
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citizens
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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