Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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As we know, bringing up a
child
is very complex since parents should be aware of the values
which
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pass
to
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their
children
.
Moreover
, some people believe giving
children
freedom
of choice in their daily
matters
will lead to people who only think about their own selves.
However
, there are others who believe having
this
freedom
of choice is important for a
child
. In
this
essay, I will discuss both perspectives and present my own opinion. On the one hand, giving
children
space to make
decisions
about their own daily
matters
is important. By giving
this
freedom
,
children
will learn to be independent. Since
,
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learning
this
charecterestic
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characteristic
can help them as
a
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an
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adult to overcome some problems.
For example
, in some cultures when the
children
turn
to
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18, they should earn
they
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their
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own money and move out from their parent's house
thus
learning to be independent as a
child
will make
this
journey easier. It
furthermore
can teach them to be responsible for their own choices and accept their mistakes.
On the other hand
, some people disagree with the first group and they believe
this
freedom
can lead to a selfish person.
This
can happen when parents do not make any restrictions for the
child
. If a
child
can choose and decide in every
matters
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matter
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without any restrictions,
this
child
will become
a
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an
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illusional person who thinks everything should be how she/he wants.
In addition
,
this
can lead to the
consumerisem
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consumerism
consumers
.
In other words
, by being able to make
decisions
in every
matters
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matter
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and having no
bonderies
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boundaries
, the youth never
undrestand
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understand
the value of money and the hardworking behind the process of earning that ,so as an
adult
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adult,
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they will experience difficulties.
To conclude
, making
decisions
on all the daily
matters
by
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a
child
can cause many difficulties in their adulthood. I believe
children
should not be able to make all
decisions
by
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on
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their own
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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