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Some people who have been successful in society don't attribute their success to the theoretical knowledge they learned from their university. Do you agree or disagree that theoretical knowledge is not as valuable as expected?

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It has been shown that many successful people no matter in what field never connect their success with what they learned from their university. As
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 agree with the fact that
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theoretical
 knowledge isn't as important as many
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 how theoretical knowledge can be used when needed. At
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 it is obvious and known that knowledge in general has many departments whether it's related to science, health, politics, history, languages etc. But the question why is it different
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 theoretical understanding? The answer is simple actually though not many can comprehend the idea of how much time is spent in studies just for them to not use more than half of what they have learnt, see when it
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 to academic education you tend to focus on a specific branch no matter what your major is, meaning that you have limited information about many other things in life if you don't put effort into yourself ; being intellectually smart does get you places, yet the
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 of you exceeding is somewhat low.
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, when it comes to not only being educated but
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 many other types of
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awareness-knowledge
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 as being practical, emotional,
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as well as
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 having common sense can actually get you somewhere in life.
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, gaining social and practical
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awareness
 can be easy but the problem is how you use it to
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excel
 in whatever you want, well people who have more
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experience
 in
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existence
 and put themselves out there more
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 likely to be more successful, unlike the others who fully think being
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intelligent
 in one academic field will be enough.
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, having a complex
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 degree is indeed helpful but it's
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 not enough and will never be enough, it is extremely simple to gain multiple types of
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knowledge
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 it depends on how you use it in life.

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