Some schools are very strict about their school uniforms and the appearance of their pulpils, while other schools have a very relaxed dress code. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a school uniform?

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Some schools adhere to strict rules and discipline regarding
school
uniforms
and student appearance ,
however
not all , as some of them prefer to
loose
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uniforms
,
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because
school
is our second home ,
moreover
we should relax and feel
ourselves
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comfortable .  Advantages of
school
uniform
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:
Majority
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of the schools prefer dress codes , as
this
creates a unified picture and everyone can understand that there are no outsiders in
this
school
,
however
only
students
. The
school
uniform gives the
students
a more strict and serious look . They are
also
used to avoid ridiculing and bullying other
students
because of their clothes , and so if there is a uniform,
then
in fact it is the same for everyone . When everyone wears the same attire , it minimizes the pressure to wear trendy or expensive clothing, fostering a sense of equality . Disadvantages of
school
dress code:
Firstly
is the impossibility of self-expression . Children , especially at the age of 14-16 , it is important
for
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them how they look
like
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, they always want to dress their own way .
Uniforms
deprive them of the freedom to express themselves ,
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their own style .
Then
of course it is comfort . Not all
uniforms
are convenient to wear every weekday .
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students
should spend their money to buy
uniforms
, which is
also
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conclusion
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it should be said that everything has benefits and disadvantages,
as well as
uniforms
. I believe that every
school
has their own rules and if you are a student of
this
school
, you should listen and follow
it
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