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The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph and bar chart provide the average maximum and minimum degrees Celcius temperatures,
as well as
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 the average number of
days
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 with rainfall, presented on a monthly basis in
two
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 Australian cities.
Overall
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,
in
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both
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two
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the two
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 areas made inverted curve graphs with
Canberra
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 showing the coolest
temperature
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while
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Brisbane
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 had the highest rainy day in
first
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the first
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 quarter years. Regarding the first picture, July recorded the lowest temperatures in
two
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 cities for both maximum and minimum
temperatures
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temperature
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 categories. Interestingly, the smallest number for maximum
temperature
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 in
Canberra
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 had a narrow gap with the minimum
temperature
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 in
Brisbane
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, at around 10C. In minimum categories, the first six
months
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 and the
last
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 six
months
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 shared almost the same rate, showing in January and December at nearly 20C in
Canberra
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 and approximately 12C in
Brisbane
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.
Moreover
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,
Brisbane
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 recorded the hottest month for 30 Celcius in February, reaching the highest
temperature
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 compared to other
months
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 and
another city
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other cities
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.
On
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In
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 the second picture, from January to March, the number of
days
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 with rainfall in
Brisbane
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 was between 13 and 14
days
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, twice as much as the total in
Canberra
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.
However
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, from July to October,
Canberra
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 overtook the portion at 10
days
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,
whereas
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Brisbane
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 remained around 7 to 8
days
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. In the
last
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two
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months
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,
Brisbane
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 rebounded to dominance at 10
days
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 in November and 12
days
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 in December,
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otherwise
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otherwise,
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Canberra
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 presented the same day at 7
days
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 over the
two
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months
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words days, two, canberra, temperature, brisbane, months with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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