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The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-the minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecast. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-the minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecast. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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A diagram shows the process of the collection of real-time
information
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 on the weather, made by the Australian Bureau of Meteorology.
Initially
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, the
information
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 is gathered via 3 main sources, including the satellites in the sky, the radars on the ground and the drifting buoys on the water surface.
On
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In
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 the next stage, there are different ways to proceed
the
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with the
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information
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 obtained
by
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from
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 various sources. So, a satellite photo is generated via satellites, a radar screen - via radars, and,
finally
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,
synoptic
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the synoptic
a synoptic
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 chart is a product of
bouys
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buoys
. After the analysis and
forcast
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forecast
 making up, the
information
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 can be sent to end users via several channels. A weather broadcast is either shown on TV during the news or is listened to via radio or telephone.
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, on the telephone listeners will hear a recorded broadcast
instead
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 of up-to-the minute forecast.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words information with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
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