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A friend of yours is thinking of going to a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: explain why you think your friend would enjoy camping. holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go on camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Shreyas, I hope you
well
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, I recently got your letter and you asked me
some
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 clarification about your plan
of
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summer
 camping. I know
this
 is your first camping so I
everything
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 explained
it
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in
this
 letter. I think you will definitely enjoy
this
 camp because during our school days, as our conversation
as
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spoke about
summer
 camping, you really liked that to explore everything like trekking
,
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 or climbing a mountain. Especially, your spot is Kodaikanal hills which is really famous for adventures so definitely you will enjoy more. I would like to say some drawbacks which I had
it
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on my
last
 camping. Don’t forget to take personal protective
equipment’s
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equipments
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such
 as safety shoes, torch light, scarf, and everything you have to arrange it by yourself.
Moreover
, you need always be with your friends because there are some animals like elephants,
tigers
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will
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 be there so mind it. I would like to come with you for
summer
 camping because I have some experience
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 trekking or others. So it will really help you more,
as well as
 I don’t have plans
on
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summer
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the summer
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 so my wish
to
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 come with you. I am waiting for your acceptance; better you will reply
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this
 letter. Lovely, JOHN PAUL
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • serenity
  • outdoors
  • refreshing
  • hustle and bustle
  • inherent
  • foster
  • distractions
  • cost-effective
  • unpredictable
  • wildlife
  • adequate preparation
  • physical demands
  • researching
  • campsite
  • lasting memories
  • mutual interests
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