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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The two maps give information about the development of city hospital
road
Use synonyms
 assessment in 2007 and 2010.
overall
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, it can be clearly seen that there are various extended amenities built,
such
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 as
public
Correct article usage
a public
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 car park and bus stop in 2010.
Moreover
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, there were two
roundabout
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roundabouts
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 constructed
in
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on
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 Hospital
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road
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Road
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 to improve more effective traffic transportation.
Firstly
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, there was a circular
road
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 added, which
connect
Wrong verb form
connected
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City
Correct article usage
the City
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Use synonyms
road
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Road
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 and
Hospital
Correct article usage
the Hospital
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road
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Road
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, in 2010. By 2007, six bus stops
was
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were
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 located
surround
Wrong verb form
surrounding
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 the Hospital
road
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, three
in
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apply
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each east and west.
However
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,
bus
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the bus
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 station was constructed
in
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on
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 the west of its
road
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, and
car
Correct article usage
the car
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 park, located
in
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on
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east
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the east
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 side allowing both public and staff parking, was changed to accept just staff in 2010.
Furthermore
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,
there
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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was another roundabout added, connecting
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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 and Ring
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road
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Road
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. The Ring
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road
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Road
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, surrounding the city hospital had
public
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a public
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 car park built
in
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on
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 the east side of it in 2010.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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