In the past, most people lived in the countryside and worked in farming. Some people believe that this was a better way of life than the way most people live today. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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There is no denying the fact that farming is
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for any society,
while
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held belief that living in a suburban area is better than living in an urban area, particularly
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today. there is
also
an argument that opposes it, in my opinion, I believe that living in cities is more convenient and
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people
with more opportunities to develop and enhance their
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countryside.
To begin
with, previously
people
's lives were not demanding, there were fewer requirements.
In other words
,
people
's needs were limited to certain things
such
as safety, food, and marriage.
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,
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were able to fulfil those needs within farming communities in rural
areas
, the quality of
life
was simple and not sophisticated,
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reason why currently
people
might
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prefer staying in rural
areas
. Another point to consider, today's technology and advancements in various aspects of
life
have allowed for many improvements in quality of living that were not available in the past. It is
also
worth noting that, the present offers a considerable probability of
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a better
life
.
furthermore
, the possibility for personal growth and professional development is higher.
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, the opportunities in large cities or urban
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can secure a superior future by means of well-paying jobs. In conclusion, despite
people
having different views, I firmly believe that the quality of living in modern society is greater than staying in rural
areas
where the stress is much lower, but unfortunately
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life
to some extent is limited, especially regarding entertainment and building fortune.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • countryside
  • farming
  • urbanization
  • stress-free
  • tight-knit
  • sustainable
  • subsistence
  • technological sophistication
  • professional advancement
  • quality of life
  • romanticize
  • ancestral
  • industrial revolution
  • agrarian
  • nostalgic
  • diversification
  • modern conveniences
  • holistic well-being
  • social dynamics
  • longevity
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