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In recent years, a huge number of people have had a propensity to read e-books rather than paper books. Why is that? and what problems can that have on libraries?

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Nowadays, more readers are more inclined to
reading
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 electronic
books
 over physical ones. Why is there a drift away from paper
books
 and how does that impact
libraries
.
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 There is no doubt that reading is a pleasure, and avid readers find
an
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immense pleasure
collecting
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books
. Being able to physically hold a transcript and smell the pages not only adds to the experience, but it
also
give
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 it a uniqueness. Despite that, more people tend to use electronic
books
 and electronic readers, most likely because of
the
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easier access to a larger and more diverse collection no matter where you are in the world and no matter what time it might be. Releasing an e-form
also
 reduces the cost of printing and assembling the book, making the
books
 more affordable and quicker to release.
unfortunetly
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Unfortunately
, the first ones to suffer from
this
 technology.
Although
 the shelves got fuller and fuller of
books
, the seats at the
libraries
 got emptier and the main issue with
that is
 countless lost jobs, and multiple
libraries
 closing, despite the few regulars that keep attending and visiting, there are not enough funds to keep the book heaven sustainable and
a
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aflot
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afloat
. In a time where everything is within a click, it is hard to make people leave the comfort of their homes and go to
libraries
 to enjoy a good read.
This
 attitude
sadly
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is changing the world we live in and sadly there will come a day
where
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libraries
 will be a thing of the past.
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