It is shown that many criminals have a low level of education. Some people argue that the best way to reduce crime is to educate criminals in prison to help them find jobs when they leave prison. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying the fact that
education
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is fundamental for all
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there is a commonly held belief that criminals have
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standard of
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and that educating them could help reduce
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crime
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the crime
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rate, there is
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an argument
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it. In my opinion, I consider that judging
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criminals should not
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focus
primarily on punishing them but
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their
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as well.
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with, in
prisons
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where offenders are incarcerated for violating the law, one method has
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its efficiency to some extent.
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, isolating those who committed crimes from
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is mainly intended to protect
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from harm.
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, prison sentences are limited, and after serving their time, inmates will eventually return to
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, if a burglar
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their sentence, the question arises:
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the underlying reason that led the burglar to commit the
crime
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been eliminated? Another point to consider, criminals often have poor financial status
as well as
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low levels of
education
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. It is
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possible to say that poverty is a shared factor among offenders. Regardless of their reason for committing crimes,
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prisons
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prison
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authorities must impose rehabilitation programs to improve inmates’ skills and to prepare them to fit back into
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According to
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studies in
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the UK
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, the cost of operating
prisons
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is significantly high. Several countries
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as
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the Netherlands
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transformed many
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into rehabilitation
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,
as a result
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, they found that the
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rate dropped by 5%. In conclusion, despite differing opinions, I firmly believe that authorities must reconsider the primary purpose of
prisons
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. By providing educational programs to inmates,
society
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can reduce
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crime
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the crime
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rate and help former offenders reintegrate successfully.
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