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Writing Samples
Band 6

Your local public library wants to make improvements to their services and facilities. In order to get ideas from the public, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. Write a letter to the librarian. In your letter -describe what you like about the library - say what you don’t like - make suggestions for improvements

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Dear Sir, I am writing
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 that were asked for by the public. I have been visiting the library since my high school days. I have got many memories with it, since when I came here for the first time to the premises with my parents. The book collection is amazing,
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 the support staff has been working with the institution for a couple of decades, they still seem to be energetic
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 their first day. If one asks about the books' catalogue, I would say there is a book from every genre ,
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, comics,information technology,physics or even the medical journals. There is only one thing, I would say ,
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 the library's working hours. If the timing can be made more flexible , the increase in footfall will be quite visible. The library is the most famous attraction among the dwellers, and in future I would like to see it as a marvellous destination among the youth. Yours truly, S

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Task response: You answer all parts, but add more clear ideas about what you do not like and give 2 or 3 clear new ideas for change.
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Task response: Your tone is polite, but some lines sound too general. Make your purpose more direct and specific.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end, but some sentences are too long. Use shorter sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Put one main idea in one paragraph. For example: what you like, what you do not like, and your ideas for change.
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Task response: You say what you like about the library and give one idea for improvement.
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Task response: The letter keeps a polite style that fits writing to a librarian.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The greeting and closing are good for a formal letter.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The order of ideas is mostly easy to follow.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extensive collection
  • resourceful
  • helpful staff
  • friendly assistance
  • tranquil atmosphere
  • comfortable environment
  • limited operating hours
  • restricted access
  • insufficient study spaces
  • quiet spot
  • extend the hours
  • accommodate
  • private study rooms
  • cater
  • digital resources
  • e-books
  • audiobooks
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