Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful, but they are also likely to suffer from negative social consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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in numerous countries that lead to the successful
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development in the
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,
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although
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will negatively impact the life of its
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. I concur with the statement that long working
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will affect the
workers
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in a negative way as I will elucidate the reasons regarding
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with, it is true that working
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affect the successful results
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on
economy
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the economy
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in many countries.
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, it can be seen in China, where the
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are forced to work
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a long amount of time per week. As a
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, many local
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companies
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face a huge profit that
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China as one of the developed
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country
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countries
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with the highest increase in
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the economy
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over the years.
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, with the strict regulations, the
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workers
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also
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force
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to obey the law and
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not have
a
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freedom and
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benefits
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that
comes
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from the company,
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as
day
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off, annual leave, maternity leave, etc.
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definitely will affect the rate of satisfaction of the
workers
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. It cannot be denied that if the satisfaction of the
workers
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in a
country
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decline
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declines
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,
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highly
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the social life of its
people
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. To illustrate, if the
workers
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force
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to work above the average working
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that
consider
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health
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and normal, they will likely suffer from many mental health
problem
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problems
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. Depression and anxiety would
be occur
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in many
workers
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that
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makes
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an impact
for
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the health condition of the
citizen
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citizens
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of the
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. The quality of life will decrease and
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at
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the
end
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it might lead to an unemployment trend since the
workes
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workers
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have to deal with stress that negatively
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their lives. In conclusion, the trend
to
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of
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working above the average working
hours
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significantly will affect the
workers
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of the company
as well as
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the
country
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regarding the decreasing of the quality of
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life
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of its
people
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.
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, I must respectfully disagree with the idea of
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overworking
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since the
healthy
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of the
people
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still
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important than the
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country
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country's
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interest.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average working time
  • Economically successful
  • Negative social consequences
  • Employee burnout
  • Competitive edge
  • Global markets
  • Consumer spending
  • Productivity
  • Work-life balance
  • Mental health issues
  • Community ties
  • Societal well-being
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