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the graph below shows the number of tourist visiting carribean island between 2010 and 2017

the graph below shows the number of tourist visiting carribean island between 2010 and 2017
#tourist #carribean #island
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The line charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the
amount
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 of
tourist
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tourists
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 visiting
carribean
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Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the total
visitor
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 of
carribean
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Caribbean
island
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 for
both
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apply
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visitors that stay on the
cruise
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 and stay on
the
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apply
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island
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grown
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has grown
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 through
years
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the years
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. In 2010, it
is
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was
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 more popular to
stayed
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stay
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 on the
island
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 rather than on the
cruise
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 and
it
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apply
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shown
by
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in 2010 the
amount
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 of people
stayed
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who stayed
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 on
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island
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the island
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is
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was
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 multiple than the
amount
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 of people
stayed
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who stayed
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 on
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cruise
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a cruise
the cruise
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. The number of
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visitor
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visitors
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 staying on the
island
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have
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has
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continuosly
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continuously
growing
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grown
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 until it reached its peak
on
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in
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 2013 and stood steadily
in
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at
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 the same
amount
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 for the next three years until
its
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it
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 slowly decreased in 2016 and slightly rose in 2017. In 2010, staying on
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cruise
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a cruise
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 ship
is
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was
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 not
the
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a
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 popular option but the
amount
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 of visitors has
continously
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continuously
continuous
growth
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grown
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 in 2011 the total value of
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visitor
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visitors
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is jump
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jumped
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 multiple than its value in 2010. In 2012, the number of
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visitor
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visitors
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has
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apply
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jumped back to its value in 2010. But there's a positive trend in the following years, in 2013
the
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The
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 number of
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visitor
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visitors
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has
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apply
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continuously
continuous
continuosly
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continuously
growth
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grew
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 until
its
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it
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 reached its peak in 2017 and became more
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popular
popluar
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popular
 than staying on
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island
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the island
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, island, visitor, cruise with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "jump" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 5 times.
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