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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the estimated percentages of the world among
males
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 and
females
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 across six regions for the
last
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 year.
Overall
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, South
Asia
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 has the highest
illiteracy
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 rate as compared to other
countries
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,
while
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 developed
countries
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 have the lowest
illiteracy
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 rate among all
countries
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.
In addition
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, most women in the Arab States and South
Asia
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 were illiterate.
According to
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 the graph, in developed
countries
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, Caribbean and East
Asia
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,
males
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 and
females
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 have
illiteracy
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 rates of approximately 1% and around 2%, 10% and slightly above 10%, approximately 8% and 20%, respectively. In the remaining three
countries
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, Africa, Arab States, and South
Asia
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,
males
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 and
females
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 represented the
illiteracy
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 rates of just above 30% and around 58%, slightly below 30% and just above 50%, around 33% and approximately 55%, respectively. In comparison, South
Asia
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females
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 have the highest percentage of
illiteracy
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 among
males
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 and
females
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 of all
countries
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,
while
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 developed
countries
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 have a negligible number of illiterate
males
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females, asia, illiteracy, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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