WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar graph illustrates the estimated percentages of the world among
males
and
females
across six regions for the
last
year.
Overall
, South
Asia
has the highest
illiteracy
rate as compared to other
countries
,
while
developed
countries
have the lowest
illiteracy
rate among all
countries
.
In addition
, most women in the Arab States and South
Asia
were illiterate.
According to
the graph, in developed
countries
, Caribbean and East
Asia
,
males
and
females
have
illiteracy
rates of approximately 1% and around 2%, 10% and slightly above 10%, approximately 8% and 20%, respectively. In the remaining three
countries
, Africa, Arab States, and South
Asia
,
males
and
females
represented the
illiteracy
rates of just above 30% and around 58%, slightly below 30% and just above 50%, around 33% and approximately 55%, respectively. In comparison, South
Asia
females
have the highest percentage of
illiteracy
among
males
and
females
of all
countries
,
while
developed
countries
have a negligible number of illiterate
males
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females, asia, illiteracy, countries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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