Some people think that parents should set strict rules for their children if they want them to succeed in life. Others think that strict rules are not necessary for children to obtain success. Which do you think is better?

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Opinions are divided on whether parents should force their
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fixed regulations or whether let them freely develop themself to
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of the latter. On the one hand, it is
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understandable
why some people propose that adults should set rigid rules for their
children
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so that
they can reach the designated targets. The key rationale is that
children
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success.
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to become a professor in the future, he must try his best in the right
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strict rules can enhance the cognitive of discipline . A typical
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Asian
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tend to more obey the
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than others from Western countries.
On the other hand
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that it is a better idea for parents to let
children
freely develop their skills for getting success.
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the champion without any heavy
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Secondly
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children
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and
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. It can lead to a bad result in their career.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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