The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph below illustrates information about

annual

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the annual

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incomes of three different bakeries in Calgary between 2000 and 2010.

Overall

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, Amandine

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bakery

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Bakery

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has the highest earnings and Mari

Bakeshop

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has the fewest earnings

at the end

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of the period .

Also

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, the revenue at the beginning changed rapidly , some decreased dramatically,

some

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and some

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increased . Looking at the details , Bolo

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bakery

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Bakery

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in 2000 had

fewest

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the lowest

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total

income

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but it changed over

these period

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this period

these periods

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, so it

Unnecessary verb

apply

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steadily grew

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apply

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Also

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, Amandine

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bakery

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Bakery

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at the beginning didn’t

has

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have

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the highest earnings too . But , after 2005 it

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apply

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started

Add the particle

started to

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climb up .

As a result

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this

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, the highest year total

income

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has

this

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bakery

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However

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, Mari

Bakeshop

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Change preposition

apply

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2000 had

80,000

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an 80,000

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dollar

income

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for

year

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the year

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Correct pronoun usage

which

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was more than

others

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the others

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. But , after 2005 ,

while

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others

income

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increasing

Wrong verb form

increased

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, Mari

Bakeshop

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started falling down . It

Verb problem

has

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declined to 40,000 , so

this

Linking Words

Bakeshop

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became

Verb problem

apply

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has the fewest revenue .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words bakery, bakeshop, income with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.

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7
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

171 words

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