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The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B.

The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B.
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The chart demonstrates data about the
favorite
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favourite
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 lessons of students from two middle schools, that are
school
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 A and
school
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B
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. From an
overall
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 preference,
Sport
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 had
significant
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 proportion in
school
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 A,
as well as
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 craft/drawing in
school
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B
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.
On the other hand
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, less
interests
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interest
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were showed
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is shown
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in sport
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sport
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sports
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 and science in
School
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B
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by
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students.
Firstly
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,
in contrast
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other
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to other
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 subjects, social science indicated near rates in these schools, 6 in
school
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 A and 10 in
school
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in
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apply
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B
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. But, the biggest gap in
school
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 subjects ratings took place in
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sport
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sports
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,
was
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which was
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 21.
According to
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 the data, Science depicted the lowest number in
school
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B
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that
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which
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 is two.
Additionally
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, the highest score of
school
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B
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 was 25, mentioned in craft/drawing. Favourable lessons in
school
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 A had a stable trend, changing among 4-6, unlike
sport
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, b, sport with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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