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The graph send below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with a predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph send below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with a predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The line chart provides key information about the rate of population in four countries living in
city
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the city
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. The units are measured in percentage.
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, is clear from the graph that all nations are close to each other in per cent.
In addition
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, we saw that
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 started with a fixed per sent from 1970 to 1980 and
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 it was
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sharp,
whereas
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 Malaysia started with an increase significantly from the first year.
According to
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 what is shown the
Philippins
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Philippines
 during the years increased significantly, but
amoung
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among
 1990 and 2010 dropped slightly. Thailand started with a sharp but the figure remained stable between 1990 and 2020. In terms of Indonesia every year there was a sharp fall in percentage. But
other
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 countries there were a sharp and gradual during the year. The graph shows that many people prefer to live in a city more than the countryside.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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