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The line graph shows burglaries per thousands in four different countries between 2000 2009. Summarize the information and make comparison where relavent.

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The given line chart illustrates
burglaries
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 per
thousand
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 in four different countries from 2000 to 2009.
Overall
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,
burglaries
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 in Great Britain fluctuated throughout the period and
finally
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 experienced a decline.
Moreover
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,
while
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burglaries
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 in Greece experienced an
increase
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,
burglaries
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 in Spain and Norway experienced a decrease. In 2000,
burglaries
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 in the UK stood at around 16
thousand
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, and in 2001, it experienced a sharp
increase
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 and reached
at
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approximately 20
thousand
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. In 2004, after a rapid decrease, it reached roughly 15
thousand
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.
Then
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, after a sharp rise and
then
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 a sharp decline, in 2009,
burglaries
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 reached around 15
thousand
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. In Greece, from the year 2000 to 2005,
burglaries
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 remained almost stable and after a slight
increase
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it
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reached roughly 8
thousand
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 in 2005.
Then
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, after another
increase
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,
burglaries
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 in Greece reached around 14
thousand
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 in 2009. Meanwhile,
Burglaries
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 in Spain, stoot at approximately 6 thousands, and it increased to around 7 thousands.
Then
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, it experienced a sharp decrease, and in 2009, it reached around 4
thousand
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.
Furthermore
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,
burglaries
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 in Norway started from roughly 7
thousand
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 and from 2003 to 2007 remained stable at around 5
thousand
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.
Then
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, it slightly increased to 6
thousand
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words burglaries, thousand, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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