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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided data table illustrates the amount of short-term foreign resident
workers
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 in different states in 2003 and 2006 and the statistics of employees per 1000 individuals in
this
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 financial nation in 2006. It is clear from the data that, the proportion of employees in the US was significantly higher than in other states,
however
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, the number of
workers
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 per 1000 people in 2006 was remarkably fewer than in others (
Australia
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, New Zealand, UK).
Moreover
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, the rate of the four countries
indicate
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 an upward trend over the 3-year period.
Firstly
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, in 2003, US
workers
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 were at the apex of four countries and expressed 577,000 individuals that moderately rather than other options. Compared to
Australia
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 and the UK, which had approximately the same number of employees, the UK showed gradually more than
Australia
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 and had 137,000
workers
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.
Moreover
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, New Zealand was in the
last
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 position in the table, with 65,000 staff. Regarding the number of temporary migrant
workers
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 per 1000 people in 2006, New Zealand ranked
first,
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at 21.1, followed by
Australia
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 and the United Kingdom at 10.7 and 4.4, respectively.
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, the United States experienced the lowest position, which was 2.3.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words workers, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • trends
  • absolute numbers
  • per 1,000 people
  • growth rate
  • per capita
  • labor markets
  • economies
  • significant
  • imply
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