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Some people feel a country can't be economically progressive and environmentally friendly at the same time. Others disagree with this view. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

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Some people think that a nation needs to choose between increasing the economy or being more environmentally friendly.
On the other hand
, some people argue that both events can happen concurrently. In
this
 essay, I will explain both perspectives before stating my opinion.
First,
the implementation of environment-friendly practices can cost the nation a fortune and
requires
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 more complicated maintenance. The high price of green technologies might risk the country's cash flow.
For example
, the price of waste-to-energy plant construction is significantly higher than coal plants.
Furthermore
, its standard of operation is more complex and needs greater care.
Conversely
, the proponents claim that being a greener country doesn't harm the financial situation.
Although
,
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 the capital expense of implementing low-carbon or green strategies might seem more expensive, the operation cost can be so much lower
overall
.
For example
, the use of solar panels to generate electricity
on
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in
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 buildings. The initial cost
for
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 installing solar panels is quite expensive, but it reduces the monthly tariff of electricity.
Moreover
, a greener environment can enhance the public's well-being
hence
 lowering the healthcare expense in the long run.
To sum up
, the effort of becoming a more environmentally friendly nation becomes debatable whether it is safe for the country’s
financial
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 or not. Some citizens feel that
this
 action will lead to
economic
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an economic
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 downturn
while
 others believe that it
is
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 financially beneficial in the future. Even though it is costly at
first,
I believe that
this
 effort is necessary mainly to help conserve the environment and increase people’s health.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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