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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
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The chart illustrates the amount of money spent in The
UK
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 and
France
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 on goods consumption in 2010
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that cars were the most consumed in The
UK
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 and
France
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 compared to other categories
whereas
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 the least consumed was perfume.
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, there was a significant difference in spending money on cameras between the
UK
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 and
France
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. In terms of cars,
people
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 in the
UK
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 spent about $450,000 as opposed to
France
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 which was $400,000. Moving to computers, the expenditure in the
UK
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 was almost equal to that in
France
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 , at $350,000 and $380,000 respectively. British
people
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 spent on books around $100,000 more than French
people
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, with approximately $400,000 spent in the
UK
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 compared to just $300,000 in
France
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.
On the other hand
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, both
people
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 in the
UK
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 and
France
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 spent less money on perfume compared to other goods, with spending in the
UK
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 just under $150,000 and in
France
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 at $200,000.
In addition
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, The French did not purchase as many cameras as the British, with just $150,000 in
France
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while
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 the
UK
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 at around 350.000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, france, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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