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The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented pie charts compare data about the percentage of tourism from 4 differnt areas like Asia, Europe, teh USA, and Britania went to two various
countries
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 namely,
Australia
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 and
Germany
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 at 2 points in time that was in 1960 and 2010.
Overall
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, it was important that the portion of Aisian who went to these
countries
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 increased;
moreover
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, the fraction of the USA climbed in
Germany
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 in period of half-century.
According to
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 the diagram, European, who was the main passengers of both
countries
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 in 1960, formed 53% for
Australia
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 and 45% for
Germany
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 at the start;
then
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 they decllined to 10% for
Australia
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 and 40% for Gemany. The british, the second traveller of
Australia
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, composed exactly a quarter for
Australia
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 and 20% for
Germaney
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 in 1960; tehreafter, it decreased to 20% for
Australia
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 and 6% for
Germany
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. The graphs demonstrate that american, the second population who went to
germany
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, consituted 25% for
Germaney
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 and 12% for
Australia
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 after that,
Germaney
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, rose to just under 30% in 2010.
While
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Australia
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 fell to 7% in 2010. Asian made up teh same proportion at 10% for both
countries
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 in 1960;
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 both of them increased to 63% for
Australia
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 and 25% for
Germaney
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, australia, germany, germaney with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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