Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shred freely. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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quite valuable and should not be shared freely.
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Task Achievement
Keep working on providing relevant examples to explain your points, which will make your arguments more compelling.
Coherence & Cohesion
Be sure to include both an introduction and a conclusion, and ensure that they are clear and more structured.
Coherence & Cohesion
Focus on developing a logical progression of ideas from one section to the next.
Task Achievement
Your essay aims to cover both perspectives of the debate.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Scientific research
  • Academic world
  • Information sharing
  • Innovation
  • Progress
  • Accessible
  • Discoveries
  • Global issues
  • Education
  • Equal opportunities
  • Sensitive information
  • Privacy
  • Security
  • Intellectual property
  • Confidential data
  • Misuse
  • Misinterpretation
  • Misinformation
  • Ethical issues
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