Some feel that governments should prioritize healthcare instead of other important areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In the contemporary world,
public
Correct article usage
the public
think
that Correct subject-verb agreement
thinks
taxpayers
money should be utilized with responsibility Change noun form
taxpayers'
taxpayer's
on
the sectors that Change preposition
for
required
attention. Certain groups of people are of the opinion that authorities should focus on healthcare Wrong verb form
require
while
others opine that every sector should be given equal importance. I agree with the second statement and in the following paragraphs, I shall explain my reasons for this
belief.
On the one hand, I agree with the statement that the government should give equal importance to Education, Transportation, Healthcare and Public infrastructure. In the
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apply
society
every Add a comma
society,
individuals
Change to a singular noun
individual
have
the right to get Correct subject-verb agreement
has
quality
education. Correct article usage
a quality
For example
, the government schools should get significant
amount of funds from the Add an article
a significant
taxpayers
money so that they can have Change to a genitive case
taxpayer's
taxpayers'
a
access to a quality education. Remove the article
apply
Moreover
, if public
infrastructure is Add an article
the public
under developed
, Hospital authorities will have difficulties transporting Correct your spelling
underdeveloped
Add an article
the patient
a patient
patient
to Fix the agreement mistake
patients
other facility
because of poor road conditions or irregulated traffic.
Change the wording
another facility
other facilities
On the other hand
, some people are of the opinion that priorities for the funding should be given to the Hospitals due to
the following reasons. Firstly
, If nursing centers
are given a set budget, they Change the spelling
centres
are only look
after Change the verb form
are only looked
are only looking
certain
number of patients. Change the article
a certain
the certain
As a result
of which many patients have to suffer from discomfort because of limited financial support. For example
, In Canada, millions of patients died
because their treatment Wrong verb form
die
get
delayed because of limited nurses and doctors on duty Change the verb form
gets
becuase
managements are short budgets.
Correct your spelling
because
To conclude
, eventhough
medical sector Correct your spelling
even though
requied considrable
attention to operate normally Correct your spelling
requires considerable
but
other sectors of society can not be neglected and sacrificed for Correct word choice
apply
the
healthcare.Correct article usage
apply
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Improve grammatical accuracy. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and articles (e.g., 'public think' should be 'the public thinks') to increase clarity and professionalism in your writing.
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