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Writing Samples
Band 5

Some feel that governments should prioritize healthcare instead of other important areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the contemporary world,
public
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the public
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think
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thinks
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 that
taxpayers
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taxpayers'
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 money should be utilized with responsibility
on
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for
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 the sectors that
required
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 attention. Certain groups of people are of the opinion that authorities should focus on healthcare
while
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 others opine that every sector should be given equal importance. I agree with the second statement and in the following paragraphs, I shall explain my reasons for
this
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 belief. On the one hand, I agree with the statement that the government should give equal importance to Education, Transportation, Healthcare and Public infrastructure. In
the
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society
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society,
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 every
individuals
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individual
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have
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has
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 the right to get
quality
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a quality
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 education.
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, the government schools should get
significant
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 amount of funds from the
taxpayers
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taxpayer's
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 money so that they can have
a
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access to a quality education.
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, if
public
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the public
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 infrastructure is
under developed
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underdeveloped
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, Hospital authorities will have difficulties transporting
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the patient
a patient
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patient
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patients
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 to
other facility
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another facility
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 because of poor road conditions or irregulated traffic.
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, some people are of the opinion that priorities for the funding should be given to the Hospitals
due to
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 the following reasons.
Firstly
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, If nursing
centers
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 are given a set budget, they
are only look
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are only looked
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 after
certain
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a certain
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 number of patients.
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 of which many patients have to suffer from discomfort because of limited financial support.
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, In Canada, millions of patients
died
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 because their treatment
get
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 delayed because of limited nurses and doctors on duty
becuase
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because
 managements are short budgets.
To conclude
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,
eventhough
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even though
 medical sector
requied considrable
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requires considerable
 attention to operate normally
but
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other sectors of society can not be neglected and sacrificed for
the
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healthcare.

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language
Improve grammatical accuracy. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and articles (e.g., 'public think' should be 'the public thinks') to increase clarity and professionalism in your writing.
development
Expand on supporting details. For example, explain why education and infrastructure are critical to overall societal health, linking back to the essay prompt effectively.
coherence coupling
Smooth out transitions. Ensure that every paragraph naturally flows to the next, improving the reader's experience and enhancing the logical structure.
task achievement
Good attempt to acknowledge and discuss multiple perspectives, indicating a balanced and comprehensive approach to the topic.
coherence structure
Logical organization: You presented your views in distinct sections, which helped convey your main argument effectively.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal healthcare
  • preventive medicine
  • public health infrastructure
  • social determinants of health
  • fiscal allocation
  • government expenditure
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
  • life expectancy
  • pandemic preparedness
  • health equity
  • social safety net
  • holistic approach
  • non-communicable diseases
  • cross-sector collaboration
  • socioeconomic status
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