Online learning is becoming more popular and some people believe it will replace traditional classroom teaching in the future.

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Online learning is becoming more popular and some people believe it will replace traditional classroom teaching in the future. I strongly agree,

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, I prefer traditional classroom teaching. In education student's

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and interests are very significant. There are a lot of knowledgeable and experienced teachers in recent years.

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, I believe there are three main reasons for

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. First of all, traditional teaching helps students to enhance their knowledge and understand a lesson.

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, if students have a problem with the lesson, they can ask and get an answer.

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, it is

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productive and easy way to learn.

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, traditional teaching can

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to save

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the

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money. Nowadays, online courses are pricey and unaffordable for poorer children.

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is because, I believe traditional teaching,

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teaching at schools is affordable and helpful for all backgrounds.

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, traditional teaching benefits the communication skills of students.

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leads to higher productivity and more growth in

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life.

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is any project to work

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a team, trainees can make

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new

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and make

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connection

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with each

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this

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creates a better condition for everyone. In conclusion, traditional teaching should be survived.

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contact, saving money and

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communication are all good reasons for

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. Traditional classroom teaching can cover all

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teaching systems.

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Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph links logically to the next to improve overall coherence.

Task Response

Try to elaborate more on your points with specific examples to strengthen your arguments.

Coherence and Cohesion

Work on sentence variety to enhance readability.

Coherence and Cohesion

The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a solid structure to the discussion.

Task Achievement

Main points are well supported, though could be further illustrated with more specific examples.

Task Response

The essay presents clear and comprehensive ideas about the advantages of traditional teaching over online learning.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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for example
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

222 words

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Online learning is becoming more popular and some people believe it will replace traditional classroom teaching in the future.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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