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Band 4.5

You Should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have been busy with your studies for the past month and haven't had time to visit your family. Write a letter to your grandmother. In your letter: Apologize for not getting in touch with her sooner Explain why you have been so busy Arrange a time to visit Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Grandmother,

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Dear Grandmother, Hope you and all
family
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your family
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 members are doing well.I am feeling sorry because of
staying
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am
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 not in touch with all of you.
From
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For
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Linking Words
last
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the last
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 2
months
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months,
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 I have been so busy with my studies because of my final exams. My course is really tough
thatd
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that
that's
why
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is why
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i
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I
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 had to focus on my exams. I promise you that
i
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I
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 will visit you in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 week .I am going to have
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a vacations
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vacations
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vacation
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. I am really
exicted
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excited
 to visit you . Yours loving Kuleen Kaur
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single idea per paragraph
Try to structure your paragraphs around single, clear ideas. This will help each paragraph effectively convey your message.
logical structure
Ensure that your writing maintains a logical flow by organizing your points clearly and effectively throughout the letter.
greeting and closing
Your greeting and closing are appropriately warm and personal, which suits a letter to a family member.
suitable writing tone
The writing tone is friendly and conveys your sincerity and excitement about visiting your grandmother.
complete response
You have effectively conveyed your reasons for being busy and your plans to visit, meeting the task requirements.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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