Robots and artificial intelligent are being developed tp replace humans in the workplace. why is this happening? Do you think this will have positive or negative impact on society?

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Technology has revolutionised the world in
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robots and AI are increasing day by day. Human
beings
at the workplace are replaced by
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artificial
intelligence. The reason behind
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that more knowledge and production are done through
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Robert
and AI
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negative impact is that the rate of joblessness
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in human
beings
.
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is
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happening
, actually
people
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any issue regarding study and work within one second with the help of AI because AI
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more knowledge in the other classes like technology, artists, science and
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physics
.
Moreover
,
people
get more options on
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artificial
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regarding one topic.
For example
, in the current era, many students have done assignments with the help of 'Chat GPT' which is AI.
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done by
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quickly and fast. At the workplace,
people
take more time to finish any work and they
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not enough speed as
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to
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. The negative impact of
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artificial
intelligence and
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is that
people
are suffering from income
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because
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have covered the place of human
beings
at the workplace and
people
become
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as well as
are low in data save and durability.
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,
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have
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no emotions and feelings , they cannot understand the pain of human
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people
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dependent on AI if they
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solve any issue about study and work,
then
they are not doing
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hard work
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, immediately they have done by AI within one second. In conclusion,
people
are going to depend upon
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and
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artificial
intelligent
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so mobs should use all
this
in limit.If it is used limited
then
people
can save jobs.
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