The bar chart below shows the average number of visitors who went to six types of attractions in Canberra, on a weekday on the weekend, in 2019

The bar chart below shows the average number of visitors who went to six types of attractions in Canberra, on a weekday on the weekend, in 2019
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The bar chart illustrates the average number of
visitors
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to six different attractions in Canberra, comparing
weekdays
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to
weekends
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in 2019.
Overall
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, all six visitor attractions were generally more prevalent on
weekends
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than on
weekdays
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in Canberra. On
weekends
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, cafes and restaurants were the top choices for
visitors
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,
while
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libraries attracted the least interest. A similar trend was
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on
weekdays
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;
visitors
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frequently visited cafes and restaurants among all remaining places. On
weekends
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, around an average of 100 people went to the parks,
while
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half of the total people visited on
weekdays
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.
Similarly
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, the highest attraction of
visitors
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was cafes and restaurants, with 90 and 150
visitors
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on
weekdays
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and
weekends
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, respectively.
However
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, shopping centres were in the second highest position among all attractions on
weekdays
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and
weekends
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. On
weekdays
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,
visitors
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were least interested in the Museum and Movie theatre, with an average figure of approximately 20 and 40, respectively. At the same time, on
weekends
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, they often went to these two places, with more than double their average sum, around 77 and 80, respectively. The least attractive place to visit in Canberra was the Libraries on both working and holiday.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, weekdays, weekends with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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