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A new generation of entrepreneurs believe that privately funded space tourism will be the next exciting development in space exploration. How true do you think this is ? How would space tourism affect space exploration as we know it today?

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‏I think it is very likely that
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 travel will become a popular activity in the private sector. There are wealthy
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 in the world who want to go into
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, and there is
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 desire to take them there. All that these
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 need is the means to achieve their aims. ‏To a certain extent, that means is already available, and some wealthy business
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 have already paid millions of dollars to travel into
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. If they have done it, others will follow. Human beings have a natural tendency to go beyond their limits; it is
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 desire to 'push the boundaries' that has motivated every explorer in the past. ‏In the same way,
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 is definitely where business
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 in the travel industry are setting their sights. In fact, newspapers say that millionaires like Richard Branson are in the process of doing test flights to the edge of
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. So it is only a matter of time before
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 tourism becomes a reality for the population as a whole. ‏How that will change
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 exploration is an interesting question. As businesses will be concentrating on making profits and satisfying a general desire for adventure, it seems unlikely that they will have any influence on the work of
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 explorers. Essentially, the two activities are quite different; only by doing both would you make any link between them. ‏Having said that, if
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 tourism were to become popular, it is quite possible that it would raise extra money that could be channelled back into
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 exploration in the form of enhanced technology and communications systems.
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, in turn, might speed up the process of
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 exploration.
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Include more specific examples or references to current developments in space tourism to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next to enhance the flow of ideas.
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The essay effectively presents a balanced view on space tourism and its potential impact on space exploration.
coherence cohesion
The essay is logically structured with a clear introduction and conclusion.
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The main points are supported by relevant observations about the motivations for space travel.

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