The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
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graph shows the sum amount of people
who participated in different hobbies at one communal centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall
, most people
showed a noticeable preference for the Film club. And
Table tennis gained popularity , unlike Amateur dramatics that fell in want in the given time span.
Film club was the top most practised activity with no doubt, with only slight fluctuations between 60 and 70 Correct word choice
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people
throughout the years. Table tennis began with almost 15 people
in 2000 and had a stable rate between 2005 and 2010 at around 20 people
, but suddenly shot up in popularity after 2010 reaching 50 participants in 2020. Music performances were not available until 2005 and they have been quickly increasing in
the number of performers, reaching around 20 performers in 2020.
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and has been ocillating between 30 to 40 Martial artists since Remove the comma
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. Unlike the rest of the activities, Amateur dramatics fell in popularity with the highest amount of participants being 25 in 2005, reaching under 10 hobbyists in 2020.Submitted by miralaltalhi11707 on
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