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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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the diagram illustrates the development of
Salmon
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fish
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 from an egg throughout their life cycle which is
also
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 considered to be a large
fish
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 species and had three stages fly, smolt and
an
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adult
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salmon
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 with different sizes.
Firstly
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, the
adult
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Salmon
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fish
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 travel to slow streams upper
river
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 in order to lay eggs in
river
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 reeds under small stones for nearly five to six months before the Flyfish are born, which measure 3-8cm,
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 they start to travel fast stream in a deep
river
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 for approximately four years until they grow up to Smolt
fish
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 at 12-15 cm.
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, the
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 stage of
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 process is the Smoltfish moving to the open ocean for around five years where it becomes an
adult
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salmon
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fish
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 which measures nearly 70- 76 cm. Before the process just happened again with these adults
Salmon
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 mated and moved to the slow-moving upper
river
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 to put their eggs under reed plants.
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, the life cycle of
Salmon
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 is a natural operation and contains three cyclical phases, beginning with the laying of eggs and ending with the
adult
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Salmon
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fish
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.
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