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You want to sell some of yoyr furniture. you think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you.

#yoyr #furniture #friend
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Dear Amie, I hope you're doing well. The reason to write
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 letter is to let you know that
i'm
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I'm
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 selling furniture that you found amazing. As you know, you visited my house
last
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 time I told you that I'm planning to own an apartment. Well, that's
a great news
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great news
a piece of great news
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 to tell you I bought a new apartment and moving in after two weeks.
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, the place is far from here and the living room is not big enough to accommodate
entire
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 furniture. I thought you would be interested in buying it, as you were asking about it. Particularly, I would like to sell
sofa
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a sofa
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 set and a dining table.
Sofa
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The sofa
A sofa
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 set is made of leather and is in good condition. There are six chairs with wooden dining
table
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tables
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 which are quite comfortable and are
well- maintained
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well-maintained
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. You can come
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 weekend to view the furniture again as
this
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 would
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 be
great
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 time for get together . Please let me know
of
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if
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 you're keen
in
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on
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 buying it. I considered you before others
,
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 because you are my close friend. Best Regards, John
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coherence cohesion
Try to structure your writing more logically by organizing content into distinct paragraphs. For instance, one for introduction, one for the main points, and a small conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Although there is a clear introduction and intention behind the letter, consider adding a concluding sentence that summarizes your offer or invites the friend again.
task achievement
While the main points are supported, add more specific details like potential pricing or pickup arrangements to further support your offer.
task achievement
You've successfully communicated your main intention of selling furniture, and you have addressed your friend directly.
task achievement
The examples provided, such as the specifics of the sofa and dining table, are relevant and adequately mentioned, engaging the reader's interest.
task achievement
The purpose of the letter is clear and maintained throughout, supporting a well-rounded task achievement.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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